Feedback on our pitch

Positives

• Well presented (on Prezi)
• Good plot
• Original Idea
• Creative Ideas
• Lots of good enigmas
• Good synopsis

Negatives

• Wouldn't pay to see it in a cinema
• The audience didn't get to hear much about the story (we didn't explain it very well) 
• The Narrative didn't come across very strong
• We didn't establish who our target audience was
• Wasn't clear enough
• We red straight off the board instead of talking to the audience
• Didn't go into enough depth

As you can see from the Positives and Negatives, there more negatives then positives. To change this we hope to re do our Pitch, where we can explain it further and go into more depth about the Narrative, the Plot, where it is set and have more enigmas.